ADULTS-please help proof read my resume. 10 points for your kindness helping me. Thank you?

August 29th, 2009 | by admin |

  1. 7 Responses to “ADULTS-please help proof read my resume. 10 points for your kindness helping me. Thank you?”

  2. By fashionista on Aug 30, 2009 | Reply

    wrong section
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  3. By Mozz on Aug 30, 2009 | Reply

    I think your resume is in great shape. I would change the objective to something less vague. Reads very wishy-washy, like you dont know what you want to be when you grow up, you know? (Even if that’s true, never let a potential employer know.) Change potential growth in management to "Secure a Management Position in ____". You dont have to marry the idea, just know where you’re going. Take out "person of responsibility" altogether.

    Any certifications and licenses, add them after work experience, before awards

    Work experience: Anything that starts with Managing… Directing… etc, put those first. How many general managers did you assist? How many graduate students did you oversee files for? Dont use words like "many" or "several". Be specific.

    Use the same tense consistently. For example you start off by using words like "organizing" and "managing" then you end up in the past tense "conducted". Keep it in the present tense, even if it already happened. For example:

    Graduate Assistant to the (etc.)
    - Organize conference… (etc.)
    - Manage graduate students…

    INTERNATIONAL ACCOMPLISHMENTS
    - Organize and host…

    Finally, make sure it fits on one page. Use less words than you did or they wont read it in its entirety. The opportunity for details is at the interview.
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    Secretary in Administration; write and review resumes regularly

  4. By pittgirl on Aug 30, 2009 | Reply

    I think that your resume is great. The only things that I would add would be more specifics. For example, how many grad students’ files did you manage? How many restaurants on campus (instead of various)? How many official documents did you verify on a weekly basis? Also, your objective could be a little less vague and more directed to what you really want to do. Otherwise, I think you have a lot of experience and have done a nice job on your resume.
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  5. By Robin Lynn on Aug 30, 2009 | Reply

    I agree that I don’t really care for your Objective. It is too vague and not professional enough. The rest of your resume is pretty good. There are spacing issues, such as need space before before Professional Development Training and International Accomplishments, but that is probably due to pasting here to this format.
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  6. By Margaret K on Aug 30, 2009 | Reply

    Change your objective. It sounds to me like your objective is to obtain an entry level management position, so just say so.
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  7. By Mama Slu :) on Aug 30, 2009 | Reply

    I’m an HR manager in the retail industry so my standards are a little different, but here are my things for you:

    1-Combine your skills into your objective to come up with an impressive statement that will make someone want to keep reading…as someone else said, make it tell us what you want to do and what skills you have to do it… "To use my bilingual abilities as well as my passion for research to effectively lead a collaborative team of individuals to drive profitability." Something more creative and specific and just delete the skills portion totally

    2-Skip your GPA. No one really cares and if they really want to know, they’ll ask. But with a masters, they know you aren’t a dummy. :)

    3-I know you are proud of getting your first degree done quickly, but it has nothing to do with you getting a job. It could actually backfire on you by giving the impression that you have no work/life balance and that you could burn out soon. Not what you meant, but don’t give ambiguous info that isn’t 100% pertinent.

    4-You were GA to the Chair of What?? Be more specific there…

    5-Come up with an action word to describe what you did as MPA liason

    6-Move Awards up under work experience in case they don’t get to the bottom of your resume

    7-The international accomplishments are cool, but wordy on your resume. Either incorporate some of the details into your cover letter or save it for the interview. Remove who the speakers were or what the gala funded.

    8-Sorry if I seem harsh…. I know I stop reading with any interest if it doesn’t keep my attention or if it seems to have stuff everyone else’s resume says. You’ve done some great things between school and work… good luck with the job search!!! Hope it is short! :)
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  8. By Sandra T on Aug 30, 2009 | Reply

    Too much! I couldn’t be bothered to read it all. A bit of advice from someone who has to read them first before the boss does! Write it so someone with limited time who can read it and put you as as a stand out. ie put your personal details first, then a list of qualifications modified to suit the job you are applying for. Say why you want this job and then say something like, ‘I would appreciate the opportunity to an interview and I would appreciate your time to discuss my other skills.
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